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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#businesses #emphasise #products #development
Part 2(A4반 페이지) Describe a time when you gave
advice
 to others You should say: When it was To whom you gave the
advice
 What the
advice
 was And explain why you gave the
advice
 When my younger sister took
a
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her
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 first math
test
 of her life, she felt very nervous. So, my sister couldn’t sleep well before the
test
 day. I worried that she
can’t
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wouldn’t
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 have a good
grade
. That
test
’s
grade
 is not important now. But, when she
take
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 the important
test
, great condition is too important to the
test
grade
. If she couldn’t sleep well like that at that time, she
can’t
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couldn’t
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 get the best
grade
. So, I said
that
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apply
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“You can’t get the
grade
 that you want when you have the worst condition again and again. It won’t be gone, and it will bother you more when you take the most important
test
 in your life, too. You
have
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apply
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must practice to sleep well before the
test
.” My sister was thanks to me. I’m very proud and I don’t
worried
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worry
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 anymore about my sister’s
grade
, too.   Part 3(문제당 7줄 이상) What are the problems if you ask too many people for
advice
? What are the personalities of people whose job is to give
advice
 to others? Is it good to ask
advice
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 from strangers online? Should people prepare before giving
advice
?
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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