Many universities graduates cannot find a job in their choosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what is your opinion, should be done about it?

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In recent years,
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aroused concern that it is hard for many university graduates to find a desired
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. With the rapid development of
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and the steady growth of people’s living
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social competition becomes increasingly fierce. No wonder that university graduates are not easy to be employed. So how to face
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question today, I think it can be improved from the following aspects.
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, the graduates need to realize the fact that chosen profession is not something
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for granted and have mental preparation to get nothing. If people don't want to waste their time waiting, they can lower the requirements appropriately and accept work in the long run.
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, once my father's ideal career was a journalist, but
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long period of unemployment had forced him to end up becoming a teacher and soon he enjoyed it.
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, parents always play an important role in their children's
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hunting as a reliable source of information. If parents do not reach an absolute consensus on their children, they can set forth compromise proposals, trying to reduce
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burden of both
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but not least, the government has unshakeable duty to take effective measures to solve employment difficulties, like introducing policies to expand domestic demand and offer more
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. All in all, finding
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market after graduation difficultly is not a trivial matter. It exerts great effects on social development. We need to face it, understand it and solve it, the sooner the better.
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