In many countries today, people in big cities prefer to live alone or in small family units rather than larger, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays there is a

trend

that numerous

people

accommodate alone or with

small

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a small

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number of family. Some

people

think that it is a positive circumstance, whereas others believe that living alone can be a dangerous decision. In

this

essay, I will compare advantages and disadvantages and contend that

this

trend

affects positively

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apply

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society

. Clearly, there are many reasons why it is disadvantageous.

Firstly

, there is an increase

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low birthing and high

aging

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ageing

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society

. If young

people

who are from 20 to 30 are familiar with living individually, they would live alone or with their life partner without children.

Thus

, it can affect negatively

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the community.

Moreover

, it will be difficult for protecting themselves from crimes or

getting

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get

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sick badly at home. Recently there are enormous crimes which target

for

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apply

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people

who live alone and

also

there

are

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much concern that the elder died due to solitude.

Nevertheless

, I believe that there are merits

about

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living alone or in

a small family units

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small family units

a small family unit

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. Compare to the

ast

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past

east

last

, the

society

became harder to survive and get a job. It means that it is tough to take care

family

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of family

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members. Individuals only can focus on them without caring grandparents, parents and childer.

Furthermore

, they can concentrate better on their condition and leisure time. They can enjoy time for resting

such

as watching TV, movies or reading

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the weekend.

For instance

, there is a

trend

to decorate

interior

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the interior

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of flats in Korea. A number of individuals change

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furniture

furnitures

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furniture

types of furniture

pieces of furniture

items of furniture

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and make the concept of each

rooms

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room

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. In

conclude

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although

living alone or with a small family numbers can worsen

the

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apply

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society

and be dangerous for

cimes

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times

and sickness, I think that

this

trend

has more merits due to

enjoy

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enjoying

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the public own time and focusing

one’s

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on one’s

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own self.

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3Word repetition
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22Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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In many countries today, people in big cities prefer to live alone or in small family units rather than larger, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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