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the proportion of students proficient in a foreign language in five various countries.

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The given bar chart illustrates the information about the proportion of students proficient in a foreign
language
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 in five various countries.the general overview here is that the higher amount of
language
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 proficient can be seen in the
number
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 of girls. According to the chart, it can be seen that in terms of females, India had the highest amount of
proficiency
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 in foreign languages accounted for almost 70%.
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 figure was significantly higher; almost one and a half times higher than the
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 of Thailand. The
second
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 and the
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-highest
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 were Romania and Vietnam, roughly 63% and 56%. China had lower than that, but still, its
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 was higher than Thailand. the latter had only 28% of women’s foreign
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proficiency
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. In terms of Male, India indicated the highest
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 of men’s foreign
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proficiency
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,accounting for 56%,which was slightly lower than that of the women’
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. The figure is followed by Romania,with the figure 56%. The corresponding
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 for Vietnam, Russia, and India were approximately 40% and exactly 35% and around 30% respectively.
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, China reported the least of students’ foreign
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proficiency
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 at only 19% which was almost 4 times lower than that of the Romania females
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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