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the alterations of the Sawry District between 1920 and 2020. Overall, the district had undergone a noticeable transformation alert the construction takes place.

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The given maps illustrate the alterations of the Sawry District between 1920 and 2020. Overall, the district had undergone a noticeable transformation alert the construction takes place. According to the maps, it can
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 seen that in 1920, there was a main rose called Oak avenue running from the west to the east, on the north of
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 road situated
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four houses which severing by a smaller street. To the northeast Elmwwond river was located along with the beach nearby. On the southwest stood an enormous factory. On the south of
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oak Avenue, there were two houses
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 by a shop between them. All of these was surrounded by a small street. There was a Miller’s lake to the southwest, above it stood a Prestwich Primary school.
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, a large green area was on the east. After development, by 2020, the hotel was constructed to the south of the smaller street where the house stood, while the other houses to the north remained unchanged but one of them
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 to make way for the expansion of a road to the north,with the construction of the bridge across the river. The beach had now gone, it was replaced by a bike path
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 the river. The factory was turned into a Yang Office Complex. On the south of the main avenue, the hose to the west was relocated to the east with
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 addition of one new house.The shop remained unaffected, and there was a new shop situated
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, where the house stood to the west, the two
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 was built.
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, the trees
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cutting
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 down to make room for the relocation of The Prestwich Primary school, while where it stood the Lonoco Petrol was constructed.
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