Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to work at a job you enjoy than to make a lot of money. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

There is an argument that whether
people
should choose a
job
they enjoy or the one that helps them earns a huge amount of money. In my opinion, I both agree and disagree with the statement that following one’s passion is better than making a large amount of money because of the following reasons.
To begin
with, a favourite
job
can bring
people
a sense of happiness. Since the time
people
spend most of their
life time
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lifetime
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at work, it is important that they had better do what they enjoy. By doing so, they will have
motivation
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the motivation
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to get out of bed and go to work during extreme weather or they may have a lower chance to face
burden
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the burden
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from
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of
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workload
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the workload
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.
As a result
,
people
might have a sense of
job
satisfaction.
In addition
, when someone has an enjoyable
job
, he
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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