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Some schools start teaching a foreign language in primary school years. Do the advantages of teaching foreign languages to young children outweigh its disadvantages?

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It is argued that learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 is better than learning it at secondary
school
 for kids.
This
 assay
agree
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 with the statement since the
language
 learning ability of teenager is inverse proportional to their age. The
language
 learning ability will be reduced when they grow up. As scientific research found that the development of
brain
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 of kids is most active when they are young.
However
, when
kid
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get
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 older, the ability or speed of development will be lower.
In other words
, the effectiveness of learning
foreign
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language
 will be reduced when
children
 get older. If we can teach them as earlier as possible, the effectiveness of learning a foreign
language
 will be greater.
Therefore
, the higher priority for
children
 at primary
school
 is learning
foreign
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language
. Everything has two sides. One of the disadvantages
for
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 learning a foreign
language
 earlier is that they will lack
of
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time
 for other activities,
for example
, earning social
skill
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, playing sport or exploring their interests.Due to the spending
time
 to learn one more
language
, the
time
 for them to conduct other activities will be compressed.
As a result
,
children
 may lack
of
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social
skill
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skills
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 or interest
of
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 exploring since they put
many
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effort
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of
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into
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 learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 at primary
school
.
Although
 there are some disadvantages
for
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this
 statement, I believe the advantages will outcome the disadvantages. Learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 has
higher
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 priority when
children
 at primary
school
. It is because kids can spend their
time
 in other aspects in secondary
school
 or university. The effectiveness will not be reduced if they conduct these activities later.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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