In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In the world of competition, every
company
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utilize
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advertisement to promote the latest feature of their
products
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because
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encourage
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people to choose and purchase their
products
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which can make a profit for their business. Personally, I believe that
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is a positive development not only for the
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itself but
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for the economic system.
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of all, advertising is one of the effective methods for encouraging people to buy the
products
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. Without advertisements, people hardly know what is the new feature of
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merchandise or what is the benefit
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purchasing.
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, it is impossible for them to buy things
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is
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never introduced. To illustrate, many Thai teenagers choose to purchase the latest version of
Samsung
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the Samsung
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smartphone which they see through the advertisement because they receive all the information that they want
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as the
quality
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of the camera, the function for playing games and the ages of
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the battery
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. It makes them easily decide to buy
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brand compared to the others which are lacking
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information showing how fantastic of their product's
quality
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.
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, using advertisements as a technique for promoting the new
quality
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of their
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is a positive development because it not only increases the sales rate but
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emphasizes the importance of
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creativity. When advertising becomes an essential part of the business, every
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tends to broaden
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vision of creativeness
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as hiring more creative workers.
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, the job opportunities for
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multimedia artists will
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and it can solve
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jobless problems in the long run.
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, In conclusion, in my opinion, some
of
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business
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businesses
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use advertising for presenting the new
quality
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of their
products
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in order to multiply the sale rate which
is give
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gives
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benefits for not only their
company
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but
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the national economy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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