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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Atlantic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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No doubt, these days people like to do
adventerous
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adventurous
travel
 whether it is in
harsh
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 climate or not. Nowadays,
travel
 is a passion for many individuals through which they can explore
this
 globe and explore different destinations and cultures. Most of the travellers
travel
 to climate-challenged
places
 like hot deserts and cold icebergs. Both kinds of
places
 have pros and cons of travelling, and in
this
 essay, I am going to elaborate my views in upcoming paragraphs. On the one side, there are
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 of reasons to support merit points.
First
 and foremost, many individuals choose
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, challenging destinations. A lot of tourists would like to explore unseen regions of the globe which can be opposite of their habitat. Camping and trekking trends are growing these days,
therefore
 people take out time from their busy schedule and spend time on snowy mountains or
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 hot sands.
Moreover
,
this
 gives them a chance to explore other continents and cultures of the world.
For instance
, in Dubai, most
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travellers come from Western countries because of their cold weather and the opportunity to experience summers. On the other side, there are some demerits to visiting weather-challenged
places
. Climate can be challenged for the person who is not friendly with
such
 kinds of
places
.
For example
,
travelers
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 may face scarcity of water in hot deserts, and sand storms are another risk.
Similarly
, the
places
such
 as the Atlantic or the Himalayas are challenged by climate conditions. According to a report of the United Nations, ice of cold regions is melting speedily owing to global warming.
This
 can be a disaster for tourists who
travel
 to these
places
.
Thus
,
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 of weather can affect tourism. To conclude, in my opinion, the positive aspects of visiting dangerous
places
 outweigh the negative aspects. While tourists should check about the
places
 where they are visiting, whether it is a Sahara desert or the Atlantic.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • exploration
  • uncharted territories
  • environmental awareness
  • preservation
  • ecosystems
  • fragility
  • eco-friendly practices
  • physical challenges
  • mental resilience
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • wildlife disturbances
  • cultural erosion
  • social issues
  • economic strain
  • safety risks
  • infrastructure
  • medical facilities
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