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Some people say that the best way to imporve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others , however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The society
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 has different opinions on how
pubilc
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public
health
 should be improved.There is a
number
 of
peaple
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people
 who believe that sports can help reduce the increased
number
 of
health
 problems while others believe they are other ways means .ln my opinion
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 believe they are different ways to promote
health
Firstly
, the government must work together with the
health
 institutions to hire community nurses that will go around teaching the society
health
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healthy
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 living.For
intance
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instance
 , they can start with eating
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a health
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health
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healthy
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 balanced diet, people can be taught the benefits of eating and living
health
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therefore
 reducing sicknesses in
body
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the body
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 and creating and
health
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healthy
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 community. Another example is that the
cimmunuty
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community
 should be educated that regular doctor
check up
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 is critical so that if there is any disease growing
then
 it can be attacked while still early, for
intance
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instance
hiv
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HIV
 , can be managed at an
ealier
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earlier
 stage than at a later stage
however
 all that can
stopped
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 by living
health
.
Secondly
, increasing the
number
 of sports facilities will play a role as well in
health
, young and old will get to spend most of the time at the gym stations, the community will not have to pay gym membership which is very
costy
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costly
.A crowd of people will be
be
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attracted to it. In conclusion , l believe that sports
facilites
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facilities
 being
increaesed
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increased
 will drop the
number
 of activities done in hospitals daily.
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