World would be better place if more women were in leadership positions . To what extent you agree or disagree .
A person in a leadership seat should have all the qualities like knowledge , experience , emotions and so on . Some people argue that if more females were leaders
then
the world will be better as compared to now . I partially agree with the given statement .
To begin
with , the factors that why there would be more ladies in politics . Firstly
, they would develop the rules snd regulations for girls safety . To illustrate, girls safety is a big topic of concern all over the world , if ladies had power in her hand , it would never be a topic of concern . Secondly
, females would take decision
by thinking about all the conditions like emotionally , financially and so on . Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
For instance
, when she take
any decision , she would think about the poor people Change the verb form
takes
that
how will they manage . And corruption would be disappeared she would distribute as much as she could to needy people . And the condition would be better now .
Correct word choice
and
However
, the first
and foremost reason that why gender does not play role in campaigning , knowledge about all the rules regulations also
matter
. Change the verb form
matters
For example
, when a doctor does the
operation or surgery , he has all the information regarding the patient situation , how to treat him by following the procedure carefully . As same as a doctor , politicians should all have wisdom about the public and his problem . Correct article usage
an
Moreover
, the experience should also
playing
a vital role in politics . As an inexperienced doctor do Change the verb form
play
be playing
operation
, there are a lot of risks that the operation will be successful or not . Even though a politician might be able to do politics , he will never be able to fulfil the needs of the public and makes them feel happy .
In conclusion , Correct article usage
an operation
although
a lady might be able to decrease a threat from girls because only women can understand other women's feelings, awareness and experience are also
important to be a leader .Submitted by kiranghuman43 on
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