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More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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When the pandemic had hit the entire world badly in the year 2020 all the workforce was forced to stay in their homes and
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 from there. In the initial phase, it was indeed a struggle to manage both
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 as well as
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. But soon everyone got used to
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 environment and today many companies have allowed
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 workers to
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 remotely. I opine that the advantages of
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 scheme of remote working outweigh its disadvantages. Let's look at both
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scenarios. Working from the comfort of a house provides employees mental peace as they are not supposed to travel in rush hours and risk their lives in order to reach the office on time. They can spend that time somewhere else
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 as on developing a new healthy habit or in learning to play a game which will keep their mind fresh. Research shows that
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employees, who are mentally stable can bring a lot of productivity to the table.
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 staff no longer has to worry about
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 dress code. They can wear the clothes they are comfortable in without actually hampering the output. In my country, where domestic help is a necessity for the working population, working from home provides an opportunity to even complete the daily chores all by themselves, resulting in savings. On the
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, not all people find
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 away job a boon. They may not be blessed with a good supervisor and might actually have increased working hours. Continuously working remotely, makes a person lazy or starved for some personal time and it might have health hazards. To conclude, companies have realised the benefits and the amount of saving that remote working has brought to them are huge. In future, I feel workplaces will be a bit more flexible and provide
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote working
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • distractions
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • office space
  • commuting
  • professional wardrobe
  • boundary
  • burnout
  • face-to-face interaction
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • isolation
  • workplace culture
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