The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often argued that
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enjoy coping
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other and
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the reason why fashion and consumerism thrive. In my opinion,
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is largely true though there are other potential practical explanations. Humans tend to compare their own life with the lives of
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surrounding them.
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, most individuals aim at looking not
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worse
and ideally better than others.
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desire facilitates the growth of the fashion and consumer industries as
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buy those stuff in order to
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maintain
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prosperous and beneficial appearance in the eyes of others.
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certain social group start considering a car as an indicator of success, many individuals of that society would buy a car even if they do not really need it.
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facilitating the consumerism culture. The overall wealth of the human population is growing, so the number of
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who could afford
purchasing
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new clothes and new goods is growing as well. Those
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, who have just escaped poverty, buy new things not because they want to copy anyone, but because those new things help
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to meet their basic needs.
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,
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hiking clothes make
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by foot much more convenient and safe.
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, as soon as
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could afford
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clothes they buy
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. To conclude,
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there are
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who purchase new goods just for the sake of
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maintaining
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public appearance, others buy them because of
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necessity
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conform
  • social norms
  • evolutionary psychology
  • survival
  • advertising
  • influencer marketing
  • celebrity endorsements
  • trends
  • followers
  • psychological comfort
  • social ostracism
  • mass production
  • high-end fashion
  • uniformity
  • cultural homogenization
  • globalization
  • media
  • spread
  • affordable
  • imitate
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