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Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,several consumable materials purchasing from other nations for the day to day usage even it has to take too far for transportation.There are some benefits and drawbacks so we will discuss as
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 and foremost,several nations don't have proper paddy fields for harvesting,
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 the government initiated to purchase materials from the other world to ensure to have enough things for their people daily requirements.
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, the public gets variety
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 items on their table if buy from other communities because which kind of foods
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 not
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 in their places.
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,in Kerala,the authorities take action to exchange goods from other states in large quantities to the public to
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 their needs.
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,another important merit is the society can buy the
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 with less amount than the same things they buying cultivated by locally.
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,certain demerits going to discuss in
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 are available in the market at
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 cheap rate that we do not get surety how much hygienic it is since the other places people try to sell their
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 measure which means they looking for more profit but
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 not giving the value to others health.
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,in my place,we
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 vegetables and fruits with the lesser price which imported from another region but these
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 are highly chemicalised to grow fast when the time of cultivating.
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, many people have been dying due to cancer and other harmful diseases since they have unhygienic items from the supermarkets and local shops which are bought from other nations. In conclusion,there are positive sides and negative sides to importing goods from other lands as mentioned in the above letters.The government must enforce a law to assure the product quality if used to purchase from outside points.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global economy
  • Consumer choice
  • Economic benefits
  • Job creation
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Infrastructure
  • Standard of living
  • Cost efficiencies
  • Raw materials
  • Production processes
  • Specialization
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Local industries
  • Cultural dilution
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