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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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It is significant for minors to be taught about the distinction between good and bad at a tender
age
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. Disciplining these
children
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 is important to
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 them to learn about morals.
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children
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 who are been taught in their early growth about good and bad
behaviour
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 through corporal
punishment
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 tend to uphold that when they become of
age
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, I am of the view that
parents
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 and
teachers
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 should employ some other tactics
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 as counselling and depriving them of social amenities
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 of
punishment
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punishment
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children
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 should be given, in order to educate them about good and bad
behaviour
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. Using corporal
punishment
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 by
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 or
teachers
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 to
instill
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 good
moral
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 in
children
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 at an early
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 is necessary because at that
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 they tend to learn the difference between good and bad
behaviour
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 and if they are not taught that certain behaviours are wrong, they will grow up doing it thinking that there is nothing wrong with
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 act. Research has shown that
children
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 who are been flogged by their
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 or
teachers
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 to learn that certain acts cannot be tolerated seems never to forget it. To illustrate, when we were growing up, my elder sibling and I were flogged mercilessly for stealing 20,000 Leones from our
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, up to date we never stole a scent from them taking into consideration the kind of beating we received. Notwithstanding the fact that
parents
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 and
teachers
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 can use corporal
punishment
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 to educate minors about behaviours, they should be using counselling or depriving a child
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 activities that he or she likes the most.
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 can be achieved by talking to them in a subtle manner that certain behaviours are frowned at in society and apprise them about what is expected of a child. To exemplify, my seven years old daughter hates to do her
hometask
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home task
home tasks
 and always go to school late. I used
counselling
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 method to get her to be doing her homework and
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 to school earlier each day. In conclusion, despite the fact that corporal
punishment
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 is useful in teaching a child good
behaviour
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 at an early
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,
parents
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 and
teachers
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 should employ counselling and depriving them of social amenities can
yeild
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yield
 a good
dividen
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dividend
divided
 in educating them about good morals at a tender
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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