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In some countries fast food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is a fact that some fast food joints and supermarkets provide
monetory
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monetary
 help to schools for the promotion of their products. Young
school going
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 children are easy targets for these big
compnies
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companies
 to sell their not so healthy brands. I feel
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this
 is surely a negative development. We all are aware of
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the ill-effects
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ill-effects
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ill effects
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 of these junk food items and
chemical laden
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chemical-laden
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 outputs available at cheap cost in big malls. Paid promotions have been
great
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 source of advertisements for these big brands but making use of innocent young children who are very vulnerable to these cheap and tasty beverages, is not advisable.
Schools
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is
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 a place where a child learns to identify between good and bad.
Therefore
, School should not be a place where all
such
 bad habits are inculcated amongst
the
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teenagers. There should be a strict law
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 prevents
such
 things from happening.
Moreover
, parents need to be aware
what
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of what
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 their child is eating and take extra precautions in developing good eating habits in them. To conclude, I would say that earning profits is definitely a motive behind running any venture but corporations are
also
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the
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society and
hence
 be held accountable if they are found to be playing with the health of the ultimate consumer.
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