The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in popularity of fashion in clothes and other consumer goods. Some people think that this has bring lots of waste in money and energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is ubiquitous that

people

copy each other in their lifestyles like

clothes

and other items. Some

people

argue that it is a sort of waste in terms of money and energy, and I

also

agree with

this

statement due to following reasons.

To begin

with, the tendency to follow fashion idols wastes our money and energy, owing to the fact that blindly following fashion

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by purchasing

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clothes

which are not needed in our daily life can be seen as a totally wrong decision.

For instance

, it is unbelievable to see a youngster

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wear haute couture in his or her daily life, these kinds of

clothes

are not suitable and necessary for the outlook.

Hence

, spending

larger

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fortune on these

clothes

is unnecessary and foolish, not only

waste

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money and energy

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but

also

lose

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time.

Therefore

, the copying tendency worsens

people

lives seriously.

Moreover

, concerning

social

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aspect, copying one another will lead to social identity which is largely strangling

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creativity. If

people

just follow

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their idols and imitate their outfits,

thus

people

wear same

clothes

and shoes, resulting in die out of new fashion trend.

In other words

people

would only accept

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such

copying

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phenomenon, and they

reluctant

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to be creative and self-determining for their lives.

Consequently

, it would directly deteriorate

people

consciousness and

social

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the social

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environment as a whole. In conclusion, I still strongly believe that human tendency to follow each other is wasting valuable time and

further

worsening

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social development.

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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in popularity of fashion in clothes and other consumer goods. Some people think that this has bring lots of waste in money and energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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