Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?

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whether violence on media has injurious effects on
people
in the community.
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TV programmes
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direct effects on
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because
firstly
,
people
may copy the actions they see and
secondly
the violent computer games can normalise aggression in daily life. I believe that in general, all human beings copy
each others behaviour
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. they have been imitating the comportment of their parents, siblings and
also
other acquaintances since they were born, so how in the eye of many the media cannot influence
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society. if
people
get used to behaving outrageous, I’m sure that conflicts and quarrels
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particularly in families.
it's disturbs
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the peace in
household
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,
afterward
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this
attitude will be seen
also
in larger groups of
people
. Research shows that 60% of
people
who used to play harsh video games have committed murder. unfortunately
this
is an undeniable fact. these games imperceptibly cause symptoms
such
as physical and psychological damages, isolation, depression and
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anger.
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assassination in the mind. under these circumstances,
this
man is motivated to commit murder and feels satisfied.
this
man is a dangerous threat to others,
therefore
the harms that
this
person causes are uncountable. In conclusion, I would argue that media has many negative impacts, but by not overdoing following
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things,
also
with the help of a psychologist in serious
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we can prevent these problems before they get bigger.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proliferation
  • desensitize
  • empathetic response
  • aggressive behavior
  • formative years
  • impressionable
  • catharsis
  • media psychology
  • mixed results
  • family environment
  • genetics
  • regulatory bodies
  • rating systems
  • vulnerable demographics
  • inappropriate content
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