Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?
It
is argue
whether violence on media has injurious effects on Change the verb form
is argued
people
in the community. this
essay agrees that the
TV programmes Correct article usage
apply
has
direct effects on Change the verb form
have
audience
because Add an article
the audience
firstly
, people
may copy the actions they see and secondly
the violent computer games can normalise aggression in daily life.
I believe that in general, all human beings copy each others behaviour
. they have been imitating the comportment of their parents, siblings and Change to a genitive case
each other's behaviour
also
other acquaintances since they were born, so how in the eye of many the media cannot influence on
society. if Change preposition
apply
people
get used to behaving outrageous, I’m sure that conflicts and quarrels increases
particularly in families. Change the verb form
increase
it's disturbs
the peace in Change the verb form
it disturbs
household
, Add an article
the household
afterward
Add a comma
,afterward
this
attitude will be seen also
in larger groups of people
.
Research shows that 60% of people
who used to play harsh video games have committed murder. unfortunately this
is an undeniable fact. these games imperceptibly cause symptoms such
as physical and psychological damages, isolation, depression and enhance
anger. Wrong verb form
enhanced
Consequently
, it normalise
assassination in the mind. under these circumstances, Change the verb form
normalises
this
man is motivated to commit murder and feels satisfied. this
man is a dangerous threat to others, therefore
the harms that this
person causes are uncountable.
In conclusion, I would argue that media has many negative impacts, but by not overdoing following such
this
things, Correct determiner usage
apply
also
with the help of a psychologist in serious cases
we can prevent these problems before they get bigger.Add a comma
,cases
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