as countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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it is irrefutable that, In advanced pace world, transport is a vital part of human beings life.
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, demerits outshine merits. Commencing with the most prominent reason why mankind's was purchased own private Vehicle
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and motorbikes are lethal for
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is harmful to health and
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of private Vehicles and community, make a decision on
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odd and even formulas to control the
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and most of them lethal for old person's. Because, in
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humans face difficulties.
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going their jobs and youngsters going to school and college. They can be late in
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to reach their destination.
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of countries economy and
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of horns was created noise
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and bikes are beneficial, in
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and health and the government should be starting awareness program to aware the society, because, they can
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their own vehicle to doing his works.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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