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El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.

El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.
#el #nino #name #ocean #weather #patterns #diagrams #conditions
The given process illustrates what
happen
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on
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in
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 normal conditions and EI Nino conditions in the Pacific
Ocean
. EI Nino means the warm
ocean
, which is impact the weather format on
East
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the East
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 and
West
 Pacific
Ocean
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Oceans
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.
Overall
, the Pacific
Ocean
 in normal condition is split
the
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apply
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by cool and warm
water
while
wind
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the wind
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 is strong on the east and weak on the
west
. life live
at
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in
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 the east as nutrients are rich.
Moreover
,
cloudy
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clouds
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 and
storm
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storms
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 are more in the
west
 compared with
east
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the east
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. Since that,
Austrian
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Austria
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 is suffering rainy weather but Pure is sunshine. In a normal situation,
wind
 in the
west
 pacific is weak,
whereas
 the
water
 temperature is warm. The weather
on
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in
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 that section is cloudy and
storm
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stormy
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 and rainy.
By contrast
, strong trade winds on the east pacific
while
water
 is cool. Since that, nutrients
on
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in
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 that area are rich, which is
good
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a good
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 condition for marine life. Comparing normal
condition
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conditions
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 and EI Nino status,
wind
 blowing level
change
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changes
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 despite the direction
is
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being
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same
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the same
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. Stronger
wind
 on the
west
 pacific
instead
 of the east pacific.
Furthermore
, warm
water
 toward to east,
as a result
, nutrients are reduced, which
cause
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causes
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 sea life
decrease
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to decrease
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. At the same time, storming and
raining
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rain
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 cover the whole pacific.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ocean, west, water, wind with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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