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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
map
 illustrates how a Shopping Center called Happy Valley has developed over the
last
 30 years( 1982-2012). There have been several changes, but the most noticeable being the increase in population, the introduction of recreational facilities,deforestation. In 1982, on the northwest
side
 of the
map
, the lake was situated and surrounded by trees. Just beyond ,
it
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 the road was intended to be assistance to the people in order to ensure they can find their way on a park.
Next
 to the entrance lobby area was located. The entertainment area was at the centre of the
map
. On the northwest
side
 of the Entertainment ,property Coffee Shop offered their unique coffees for the citizens, just beyond it Food
store
 was placed. On the right
side
 of the
map
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 several stores were situated
such
 as the Sports
Store
 at the top, the Electronics
Store
 in the middle and the Furniture
store
 at the bottom of the
map
.
Next
 to Furniture
Store
 Elevator was placed to make effortless enter to the
second
 floor? In 2021, the most significant change that can be observed is deforestation. It illustrates a strengthening in the population. On the Southwest
side
 of the
map
 parking lot is situated and
next
 to it is the entrance. Lake is demolished and replaced with the Furniture retail and parking lot,respectively on the south .The entertainment area stays unspoilt and on the northwest
side
 of ,it Sports
Store
 and Electronics
Store
 are placed. On the right
side
 of the
map
,Stores are relocated and Themed Restaurants provide individuals with eccentric food. On the south
side
 of ,Restaurants Food
store
 is ready to serve fresh essential needs.
Hence
,Elevator
also
 stays the same,but with the condition of having Toilets on the left.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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