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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like science and Techology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some
people
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 think that
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 is one of the most
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necessary
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school
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subkects
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subjects
 while others argue that, nowadays, subjects
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 as
science
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 and
Techology
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Technology
 are more important than the former one. In my opinion, these two kinds of courses are equally important. In
this
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 and explain my view. On the one hand,
history
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 can broaden
people
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's
horizen
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horizon
horizons
.
History
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 illustrates the things which
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happened
happen
 in
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ancient
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 and shows the process of human
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civic
civil
. Students can learn where we came from and how we lived long
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 ago.
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,
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pupils
pupil
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could
 get more knowledge from
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 courses and become
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.
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, students who learn
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 and
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technology
 is easy to find jobs. Especially in today's society, we need a bunch of
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 who is good at
science
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 to innovate new products.
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, is the
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 human
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who innovate
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 the cell phone which is
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portable
 and can
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download
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down load
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download
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 many applications which make
people
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's life more
convinent
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convenient
. And we still need more
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light weight
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 phones and have more functions to cater
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people's
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 demands. What's more, High-tech
make
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people
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's life more
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convenient
 and
science
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 offer the way that
help
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unknown
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unknow
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 things. In my view, these two subjects are both important and different benefits for us.
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, students may have different
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interests
 to learn things, what we can do is provide all subjects and let them choose
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thier
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their
 hobbies.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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