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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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It is undeniable that the old
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 is becoming minor every year. We are losing the fundamental of
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 transaction culture by losing the varieties of communication tools. How could the nations ignore the existence of
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? How we could not worry about the dimension of
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 and replacement with a specific
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 as English? I am definitely disagreeing with
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 opinion and I tend to defend my opinion.
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 of all, we all are responsible for the heritage and legacy that our ancestors left for us. we ought to be conscious and endeavour to preserve
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 crucial patrimony.
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 and cultures, they are two pale that we can’t separate them, all we know about cultures and traditions in ancient time achieved through the
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. We define our identification by the lingo. How we could be so careless about preserving old
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 despite that without knowing about our past and our culture, we are just empty void without meaning and spirit.
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 , it is understandable that nowadays in the twenty-one century everything depends on technology. In
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 hectic and fast pace life, there is no time to spend on some
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 that may not use once in a lifetime.
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, to have unit
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 for communicating in trade and politics and etc. is logical but it cant be a reasonable justification for diminishing our patrimony. There is no logic to cut our roots and justify to our children in future that we weren’t qualified depository. To conclude, from my perspective, there is no bright future without our heritage
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, that we received from our ancestors.
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, we have no right to deprive our
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 generations of their legacy. We have to use all of our effort to reclamation what remained from the past. The extinction of some old
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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