The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Salmon
begins
life as eggs on a pebbly riverbed, hidden among reeds in the slowing upper reaches of a river. After five to six months the eggs hatch into “fry”. For approximately the Correct subject-verb agreement
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four years, these baby salmons will live in the lower, faster-flowing water of their river. During this
time they measure between three and eight centimetres in length.
By the time salmon
reach twelve to fifteen centimetres, they are termed “smolt”, and at this
time they migrate further
downriver into the open sea. After five years at sea
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salmon
will have grown to adult size, which is between seventy and seventy-six centimetres. They then
begin swimming back to their birthplace, where they will lay their eggs, and the cycle starts anew.
In summary, the
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salmon
passes through three distinct physical stages as it grows to maturity. Each of these stages takes place in a very different aquatic location. It is noteworthy that the first two stages of this
fish’s life occur in a freshwater environment, while
the third
stage is in the
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