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People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the Internet. Discuss the programmes and the Internet. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Online web shows and Tv programs have gained huge popularity among the general public. Actors who are playing numerous
role
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 are getting the name and fame very quickly. The positive side about those
celebraties
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celebrities
are
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 they earn good amount of income as well as negative side is it can harm their personal life in
sometime
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. To commence with,
Celebraties
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Celebrities
 get
huge
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a huge
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 fan following over several social media apps like Instagram,
facebook
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Facebook
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,
snapchat
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 etc. as youngsters
starts
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 liking them by watching their videos on youtube whereas salary on
this
 media is significantly higher than other fields of work.There
are
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 huge OTT Content available
in
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on
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web-like
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web
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the web
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 like Amazon
prime
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Prime
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,Zee5,Hotstar,Netflix in which struggling actors
also
 get the opportunity to showcase their talent.
However
,there are many disadvantages as well
for instance
 sometimes popularity over a certain
extnt
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extent
 might ruin the privacy of
celebrity's
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a celebrity's
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 life. Insecurity develops towards the family too as strangers could harm them for the sake of money.If anything goes uncertain like
poltically
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politically
,socially so,
public
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the public
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 starts blaming them. In conclusion, it is very
benefical
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beneficial
 for struggling actors who gets the chance to work in
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film
flim
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the flim
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 industry and
also
 becomes popular.
Although
,if it is under the limit
therefore
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,
if
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it
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 is under the limit
therefore
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,it will not destroy the personal life.
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