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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well managed.

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In a modern
world
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tourism
 becomes more and more popular as a business and for many countries it is considered as an important proportion of income.
However
, without proper administration
tourism
 can create many problems.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
this
 dilemma and point out do pros outweigh
cons
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the cons
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.
To begin
 with, for sure
tourism
 is a very profitable business from
financial
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a financial
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 point of view. People are always curious about seeing interesting places and gaining new experiences, for that reason
tourism
 can be considered as an eternal way profit in a stable global situation.
For instance
, according to a recent study of the State Statistics Committee yearly income of
Georgia
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the Georgia
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 Republic has decreased 2.5 times in
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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 period.
Additionally
,
this
 is definitely because of the decline in
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tourism
toursim
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the toursim
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 industry as during lock-down borders were closed and
Geordia
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Georgia
 had lost its main source of budget.
Nevertheless
,
on the other hand
, some
touristic
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tourist
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 countries face many problems, especially during their
tourism
 season. Sometimes it becomes hard to control people whose goal is just to relax. Research conducted by Law faculty of Harvard
university
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 showed that crime rates in London during winter(which is touristic peak) exceeds a lot that was observed over other seasons of the year.
Furthermore
,
majority
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 of those who did not obey the laws were people with touristic
visa
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visas
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. To conclude, in my
opinion
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 countries need a strategy of how to handle
with
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apply
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tourists, but it is obvious that advantages that propose
tourism
 is much bigger than
negative
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the negative
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 sides.
Moreover
, it is one of the most considerable ways
for
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 improving multicultural relations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
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