Some peopel believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for a charity, umproving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger childern. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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person
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that free social activities should be a mandatory part of high school programmes. Social involvement led
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teenagers to become
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good
person
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and as well as
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good
leader
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. I
am agree
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with
this
statement but controversial with
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option. At
first
, there are so many
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people
all around us who didn’t get their rights
such
as food, education, clothes etc. in a developing country like Bangladesh. Teenagers can figure out
this
type of
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and can
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on it which led to them become a good
person
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and by that
way
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they can learn how to develop a society, how to become social and as well as how to develop a county.
For example
,
students
can tech needy
child
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who even didn’t
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their primary education which
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it
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basic
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need of a human. By
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type of
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society will be developed day by day, and
students
can learn leadership
quality
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from there.
Secondly
,
students
can do charity like fee blood donation which led them to grow up humanity or can serve
cloths
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to deprive
person
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who
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have even a single
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with them or can distribute food among the poor
people
which will help them to become a leader in future to work on it and high school is the best
time
to participate
this
kind of activities because in that period of
time
most of the
students
take wrong decision to drive them in a good way.
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, most of the
people
add with crime during teenage age because that
time
they think they can
take
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a good decision and
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what ever
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they think all are correct. But community service can not be compulsory because by all
kind
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of mandatory works
people
become
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even though it is
a good work
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. In
conclude
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, social service is a good way to build up a
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heathy
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society and high school
time
is the best
time
to drive it. As there is a proverb
that
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, “Today’s children are the future of tomorrow”.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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