Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
argue that accepting the bad circumstances like unsatisfactory employment or lack of money is
best
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way as they learn
a substantial lessons
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from that
time
period, while others believe that one should
work
hard to improve a bad
time
.
This
essay believes that working hard to overcome
from
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poor circumstances is more valuable than learning an important lesson from them. Some say that poor
time
on a person teaches a significant lesson of life to an individual that helps him in getting a good
time
in upcoming years of his life.
This
is to say,
people
lacking money or working uninterestingly in an occupation think that continuing with the situation
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them to gain the experience of their bad days that would help them in brightening their career.
For instance
, most poor and middle-class
people
in India keep working for
a
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firm years and years unwillingly with a hope that better days will come soon.
However
, I believe that just waiting for the anticipated future without putting
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efforts
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is not
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worthy
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.
People
should
work
hard to improve the unpleasant
situations
of their lives. To say that,
people
experiencing job
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dissatisfaction
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dis-satisfaction
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dissatisfaction
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or having money
problem
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problems
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should continue finding solutions to their problems
such
as by looking for
the
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other more satisfactory job to
fulfill
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their desires and needs.
This
would result in making their lifestyle the way they anticipate.
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,
majority
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of Australian
people
work
laboriously to get
the
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job that satisfies them financially and mentally. I,
therefore
, believe that one should
work
hard to overcome
from
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the poor
situations
of their
lives
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life
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. In conclusion, despite the fact that accepting the
unfortune
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unfortunate
situations
of
lives
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life
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help
people
to learn
invaluable
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lesson,
this
essay agrees that working hard to improve those
situations
are far more crucial than just accepting.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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