One of the best methods to motivate and encourage workers is to pay them according to what they produce or sell. Do you think this is the best method?

Recently, there was a discussion whether
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of workers should
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on how effective they are at their workplace, in order to motivate them and change their settings. I am strongly convinced, that
this
method can improve and repair all the
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laziness
. Nowadays,
people
seem to be unmotivated and they are not so resourceful as they used to be before
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pandemic. Almost all of them does not feel any reason so as to be more productive at their offices.
That is
why
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solution can give them again reasonable arguments to work harder. from my own experience,
people
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been made to do the job from home has gotten lazy and everything was humdrum for them. I am ensured, that by offering them
this
option they would change their attitude.
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, some of the citizens with lower income can get
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kick of energy during doing their
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responsibilities
.
People
from
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departments
such
as selling can be more convincing, in
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regards
to make costumers
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purchase
their stuff. What is more,
people
who have used to give one hundred
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percents
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have been paid as much as the
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humans
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who did not put much willingness and input for what they did.
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why they felt unfair,
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made them unmotivated and unsatisfied. To sum up, advantages
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are far more significant and they are overshadowing any
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possible
drawbacks.
Personlly
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Personally
, I reckon that if
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of
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I would be grateful and much more
encurage
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encourage
to make as much profit from their actions as they can be.
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