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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people thimk that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important tham History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Few people believe students should learn about
History
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 in school because it is an important subject. In other people’s opinion, nowadays,
Science
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 and
Technology
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 are more important
subjects
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 than
History
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. In my view, the importance of studying
Science
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 and
Technology
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 is going up because of progressing
technology
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such
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 as the internet.
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 of all, you should know what happened in the past because it is said that “
history
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 will repeat itself”. You need to learn
history
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 and think about terrible incidents that happened in the past to prevent sad events from happening again. From those experiences, you can learn the importance of your and others life, and contribute to making a better world. As above,
history
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 is definitely one of the important
subjects
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 in school.
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, it has not changed, and it is not particularly important in recent years.
On the other hand
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, today, it is difficult to live without
technology
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.
Technology
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 is existing anywhere
such
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 as home, school, public transport and so on.
In addition
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, recently AI appeared, so it is possible to replace humans
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 AI. It means jobs for humans will disappear.
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,
Technology
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 has a connection with
Science
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.
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, creating the system of
airplanes
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 needs knowledge about
science
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, and to automate the system, it needs knowledge of
technology
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. So learning both
subjects
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 may help to protect your jobs. In conclusion, several people argue that
history
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 is one of the more important
subjects
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. Several others claim that
science
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 and
technology
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 are more important
subjects
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 than
history
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. I think
science
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 and
technology
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 are more important to study these days because I think
technology
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 will be more developed in the future.
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