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Intelligence is the most important quality of a leader. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Between
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 all the qualifications, understanding plays a vital role for a
commender
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. I totally agree with
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 notion, since intellectual
leaders
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 can make useful decisions and communicate better with their juniors. First and foremost,
intelligence
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 leads to better decisions. Since
leaders
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 with
intelligence
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 have a good mindset and they take every step with strategy, they can
decide
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make
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 better
in
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decisions in
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 complicated situations
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 is a very important demand of their people. One of the most intelligent
leaders
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 of my country,
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, decided to stop selling gasoline to foreign countries in 1990 with his
well
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good
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 understanding
and
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 it led to the state industry developing in the short term.
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,
leaders
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 with
intelligence
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 listen and learn from their community. Intellectual chiefs try to be friendly with juniors
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 they listen to them, communicate better with them, learn from them and eventually make the whole system flourish. Only an intelligent leader
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this
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 manner's value.
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, Gandhi, one of the former
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 of India and absolutely the most intelligent one
who
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 was the reason for India's enormous
improvement
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improvement,
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 declared that he owed his success to his kind manner with his population. Some may argue that the most important feature of a leader is power. They think that people will obey powerful
leaders
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 and respect them
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however
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, I think
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over-authorisation
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 can lead to dictatorship
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 power is not as important as
intelligence
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since
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 people respect wise
leaders
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 more than powerfulness.
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, I opine that
leaders
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 must be intelligent enough to find better choices and have a friendly approach with their juniors.

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task
Keep your answer focused on the question. Some claims (like a specific gas sale decision) may be unclear or inaccurate. Check facts or avoid uncertain examples.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and add linking words to show how ideas connect.
structure
Make your examples stronger and more relevant to your argument; explain exactly how they support your point.
language
Watch grammar and word choice. Use simple, correct language and avoid hard phrases.
content
Clear stance that intelligence matters for a leader
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Good overall structure with introduction, body, and conclusion
content
Attempts to give examples and compare views

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • informed decisions
  • complex problems
  • anticipate
  • emotional intelligence
  • connect with others
  • inspire
  • manage conflicts
  • wisdom
  • integrity
  • execute ideas
  • empathy
  • resilience
  • motivate
  • unite
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