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The following graphs give statistics on how many males and females were imprisoned and their reasons which brought them to
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punishment during 4 years. Overall, a glance at the graphs reveals the number of male prisoners was much higher than the number of female prisoners. It is worth mentioning that the predominant
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for both sexes was driving the car being drunk.
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with, according to the information, which is given in both graphs, the
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of female law-breakers was just a tenth, in comparison to the
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of male law-breakers, which was just a little bit above a
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. Looking at the crimes which pushed them to be arrested, we can clearly notice that the top crime was driving a car in a drunk condition for both women and men, 38% and 32% respectively.
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violating the speed limit, burglary and petty theft as the reasons
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the recent arrest for the female category were just above a tenth but below the quarter for each of them. That can be said about the male reasons to be arrested, the
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reason
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after the driving drunk was violating the speed limit, and
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reason
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compiled just above the fourth. Assault was the
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reason
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to be imprisoned in the men category, the
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of it equals nearly 18%, as well as the
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regarded to the petty theft, which is almost the same.
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