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It is clear that between 1920 and 2019, three lines of household electrical products had a developing trend. Only refrigerator market share was zero in 1920, while the proportion of washing machine was about 40% and the vacuum cleaner was nearly 30%, both of percentages in families had a similar amount. Meanwhile, since 2000, the development tendency of refrigerator and vacuum
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becoming 100% occupying in every family.
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, the quantity of doing housework hours changed into decline trend during 1920 and 2019 period, the percentage of doing housework in every week had
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amount in 1920, which around a half.
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, between 1920 and 1960, the line dropped quickly, it was becoming generally 20%, while from 1960 to 2019, doing housework hours steadily decline
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until 2019 it became probably 10%.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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