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Some people get into debt by buying things that they do not need and are unable to afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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Some
people
 undergo heavy debt by purchasing
the
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goods that are non-substantial and unaffordable to them. The main reasons for
this
 are their pseudo premises in the community and irresponsible attitude toward
life
. To save
people
 from those loans,
heavy
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interest
 rate should be introduced by the
government
.
People
 maintain their fake reputation in the society they live
.
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This
 is to say,
people
 want to be the
center
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 of attraction all the
times
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time
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 in their
neighborhood
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 that enables them to spend a plethora of money by going out of their budget.
Also
, many
people
 are too careless with their
life
. They consider
life
 as
the
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 one-time opportunity that should be enjoyed to its greatest extent.
This
 results in encouraging them to become
spendthrift
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 without caring for the other essential needs in their
life
.
For instance
, most Australian
people
 spend luxurious
life
 depending upon the Center-link for their essential needs and future. To overcome
from
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this
 crucial issue, the
government
 should introduce
high
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interest
 rates on the money they give to
people
. To say
this
,
high
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interest
 rates should be generated by the banks that enable
people
 to rethink
on
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their decision of taking
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a loan
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loan
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loans
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 from the banks.
This
 would result in making them
to
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distinguish between their mandatory and unessential needs before they spend money.
For example
,
high
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interest
 rates on
the
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credit cards by
Indian
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government
 has resulted
into
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declining
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the
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number of
people
 facing debt. In conclusion, fake status in the society along with
careless
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the careless
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 attitude of the
people
 towards
life
 lead
people
 to face debt issues that can be overcome by the
government
 ruling
high
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high-interest
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interest
 rate on
loan
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loans
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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