Some people get into debt by buying things that they do not need and are unable to afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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people
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undergo heavy debt by purchasing
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goods that are non-substantial and unaffordable to them. The main reasons for
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are their pseudo premises in the community and irresponsible attitude toward
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. To save
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from those loans,
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interest
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rate should be introduced by the
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People
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maintain their fake reputation in the society they live
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is to say,
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want to be the
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of attraction all the
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in their
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that enables them to spend a plethora of money by going out of their budget.
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, many
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are too careless with their
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. They consider
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as
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one-time opportunity that should be enjoyed to its greatest extent.
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results in encouraging them to become
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without caring for the other essential needs in their
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, most Australian
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spend luxurious
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depending upon the Center-link for their essential needs and future. To overcome
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crucial issue, the
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should introduce
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interest
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rates on the money they give to
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. To say
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,
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interest
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rates should be generated by the banks that enable
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to rethink
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their decision of taking
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a loan
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loan
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loans
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from the banks.
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would result in making them
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distinguish between their mandatory and unessential needs before they spend money.
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,
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interest
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rates on
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credit cards by
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government
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has resulted
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declining
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number of
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facing debt. In conclusion, fake status in the society along with
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attitude of the
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towards
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lead
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to face debt issues that can be overcome by the
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ruling
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interest
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rate on
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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