Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes(for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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from classes that pupils do not take in educational institutions.So
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, some folks believe that voluntary programs
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as charity affairs, serving dishes at the school canteen, emergency rescue and etc should be
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of the school time.
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position because in these cases youngsters learn noteworthy lessons
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example, they learn how to
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in real life and
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gain valuable experiences during that time.
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of finding
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that you
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in your life.To cue evidence, young races can achieve these experiences by doing volunteer jobs
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have no salaries.
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, when they participate in emergency
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aids they learn numerous things like social manners, how to show prompt action in unexpected circumstances, enhance their sympathy and so on.To sum up, these unpaid tasks teach them how to encounter
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hard situations in their lives.
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, when the young population take
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in voluntary services they become proficient in responsibility too.
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you acquire skills in time management, how to give speech properly and etc.So, those free public jobs literally can improve the responsibility of young students of society. To summarize,free jobs should be
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of school because it has many positive side effects.Personally,I have the same view
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, maybe we will face obstacles in foreseeable future
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of these
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