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Some people are of the opinion that prisons are basically universities of crime, fostering the kind of behaviour they aim to eradicate, and are, therefore, not effective. Others feel that prison life is not hard enough. Discuss the arguments on both sides of the issue. What is your own opinion on that matter?

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Nowadays
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 crime rate increasing very fast.Some people believe that
prison
 can be
cure
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a cure
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 for
this
 disease . Opponents of
this
view
insisting
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 that
prison
 cannot change criminals
personality
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personalities
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.In
this
essay
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,essay
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 both ideas will be shown and will reach
objective
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an objective
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 conclusion. Advocates of
prison
 sentence believe that restricting
of
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apply
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freedom can force
lowbreakers
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lawbreakers
 to rethink their actions.The key point of
this
view
 is violence will be
a part
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apart
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from
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of
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 their
clouse
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close
 people, discussing food ,regular control may
chany
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change
 their life to rite direction .The
next
 contributing factor of advocates of
this
view
 is prisoners can learn
organizing
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 and deligating their time wisely. Opponents are seeing
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the other
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other
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another
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 side of
this
 coin.All recourses which are provided to
prison
 is
sponsered
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sponsored
Sponsered
 by taxes .From their point of
view
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,view
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 those capitals can be used
to
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for
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good
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do good
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 deeds or to read new levels
on
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of
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 scientific researches.The main supporting point of
this
 opinion is played by life sentenced criminals.Looking objectively capital punishment could be more beneficial to
government
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the government
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.A lot of recourses can be saved and fear
from
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of
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 death dramatically decrease
criminal
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the criminal
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 rate .The
next
 contributing factor supporting
this
 perspective is prisoners can
going
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go
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 up to bands because
prison
 is a perfect place to meet
like minded
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 people .
This
 can lead to
horribly
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 consequences. By summarising all
stand points
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standpoints
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 we concluded that the perfect answer
hear
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here
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 is re-establishing capital punishment and grouping prisoners by their deeds
this
 can help
alloting
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allowing
 different
leveled
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levelled
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 violence from each other.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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