Some people are of the opinion that prisons are basically universities of crime, fostering the kind of behaviour they aim to eradicate, and are, therefore, not effective. Others feel that prison life is not hard enough. Discuss the arguments on both sides of the issue. What is your own opinion on that matter?

Nowadays
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crime rate increasing very fast.Some people believe that
prison
can be
cure
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for
this
disease . Opponents of
this
view
insisting
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that
prison
cannot change criminals
personality
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.In
this
essay
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both ideas will be shown and will reach
objective
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conclusion. Advocates of
prison
sentence believe that restricting
of
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freedom can force
lowbreakers
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lawbreakers
to rethink their actions.The key point of
this
view
is violence will be
a part
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from
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their
clouse
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close
people, discussing food ,regular control may
chany
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change
their life to rite direction .The
next
contributing factor of advocates of
this
view
is prisoners can learn
organizing
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and deligating their time wisely. Opponents are seeing
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the other
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other
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side of
this
coin.All recourses which are provided to
prison
is
sponsered
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sponsored
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by taxes .From their point of
view
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those capitals can be used
to
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for
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good
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deeds or to read new levels
on
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scientific researches.The main supporting point of
this
opinion is played by life sentenced criminals.Looking objectively capital punishment could be more beneficial to
government
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.A lot of recourses can be saved and fear
from
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death dramatically decrease
criminal
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the criminal
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rate .The
next
contributing factor supporting
this
perspective is prisoners can
going
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up to bands because
prison
is a perfect place to meet
like minded
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people .
This
can lead to
horribly
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consequences. By summarising all
stand points
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we concluded that the perfect answer
hear
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here
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is re-establishing capital punishment and grouping prisoners by their deeds
this
can help
alloting
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allowing
different
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violence from each other.
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