The pie charts below give date on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give date on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
The pie charts illustrate
given
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recources
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resources
by different countries from Asia,
Europe
, America and Africa. how people from that
areas
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area
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liveed
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lived
.
Overall
, in Asia
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the world
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world
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world's
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population
has the highest proportion than others,
however
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USA and
Europe
countries gather more percentage from Consumption of Resources,
Furthermore
in
World
spending all types
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divide
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are devide
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devide
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divided
it
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apply
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proportionaly
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proportionally
proportionately
proportional
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have
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the lowest proportion
from
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of
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spendings and
others
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other
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resources collect
40
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% which is the highest in the
second
plan, Asia is
by
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far from
other
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the other
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world
population
categories.
Europe
and America have
the
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a
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similar
percent
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, there
by
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other
population
has the lowest proportion of
population
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the population
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from all over the
world
.
Finally
, in the
third
plan, compare
resourse
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resource
consumption where USA and
Europe
are the highest number with 60% and other countries which collect 40% is the lowest.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, world, population with synonyms.
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