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Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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In recent years, many people prefer to buy cuisine
instead
 of cooking for themselves.
This
behavior
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 has pros and cons which will be explained in
this
 essay. On the one hand, foods can be bought is becoming popular among people,
furthermore
, how fast it can be gotten and available due to people are on the time constraint.
For example
, with 2$, I was able to buy a meal of chicken wings but needed about 5$ to cook myself.
Thus
,
advantages
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 of purchasing
food
 are
moch
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much
 easier than cooking.
On the other hand
, some types of
food
 are considered to be bad for our health which can cause long-term health problems if they are consumed in large quantities.
For example
, processed
food
such
 as pizza and fizzy drinks
they
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can
also
higher
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 cholesterol, It can be seen that
the
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purchase fast is disadvantages. The conclusion, while packaging foods are sought after in society and I firmly believe that
purchase
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food
 is affordable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience food
  • Time-efficient
  • Culinary skills
  • Dietary habits
  • Takeout culture
  • Meal prep
  • Fast food
  • Home-cooked meal
  • Nutritional value
  • Consumerism
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Ready-made meals
  • Eating out
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