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Human activities have a negative effect on plant and animal species. Some people say that it is too late to do anything. Some people think that we should take effective action to improve the situation. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Humans, plants and animals are living together on the
earth
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. What humans do on the
earth
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 will always be related to plants and animals.
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 a living cycle. Some of them are a good relationship,
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 as doing a plat and animal conservation.
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, there are
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 bad relationships,
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 as opening the forest to make a new plantation. It will damage the plant and animal species in the forest. In recent years, there are a lot of impacts on human activities. Many people think
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 no option to do anything, except do extreme action to change the condition to get better. The reason is the age of the
earth
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 is getting older, and the damage to the environment can not be acceptable anymore. The more things to do will just cost some money spent unuseful.
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, Taking effective action is reasonable and easy to implement. There is still hope to develop the
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 condition. Since
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 the environment adapts well to the recent situation. There are still a lot of things to do,
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 as publish regulations to protect the environment. Bring to the jail everyone who damage the plant and animal species. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the opinion of taking effective action to protect the plant and animal species to develop the situation. It will give a change even a little.
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