People should work a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the present

scanario

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scenario

people

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are becoming more workaholics and they are doing many more

hours

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work

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rather than a fixed

work

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shift.

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, it is sometimes thought workers should have a fixed working period per week. In my opinion, I considered that a fixed number of

hours

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is beneficial to

people

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and

employer

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employers

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should not ask

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for

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extent

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the extent

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their

job

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. There are several positive

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impact

impacts

people

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if they have a

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regular

roster

job

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. The

first

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and foremost important thing is that they have

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apply

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spare time. They have

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time for watching TV, going

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shopping,

metting

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meeting

with friends and so on.

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, one survey has conducted in the UK,

people

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are less

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who have fixed

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jobs rather

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have extra jobs.

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, they can spend a good quality time with family.

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, it gives numerous benefits to

people

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. Another

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to consider is that workers should not do

extra

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the extra

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job

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means they feel

relax

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and refresh after working normal

hours

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work

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People

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can do some activities after

work

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when they have limited

hours

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job

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,They can go

for

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walking and can

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doing

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exercise.

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, extra

activites

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activities

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are

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also

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necessary for refreshment.

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, the owner of the company

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does

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not force

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apply

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worker

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the worker

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for extra

work

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because

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overwork

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over

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overwork

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work

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is not safe

their

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for their

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employees for physical and mental health.

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, every year 70% of

worker

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workers

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are affected

with

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different health diseases and the reason

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apply

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behind

this

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situation is that too much

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workload

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work load

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, more

work

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has

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detrimental

detrimetal

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impact on human's health. In conclusion,

people

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have more advantages physically as well as mentally when they are doing a fixed number of

hours

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job

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, while employers should understand the

workers

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worker's

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situation and should not ask for an

extantion

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extension

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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People should work a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. Do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

more and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign country. do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?