Establishing good relationship in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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because the main aim of any employee is to concentrate on

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friendly atmosphere is must

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together with great joy and happiness and it will

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for any organisation to grow big. For any

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with their

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of time and efforts to make good bond with fellow

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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