Some people think that organizing international sports events is good for the host country while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion

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Sports is a multi-million-pound industry as it is an exciting event to those who facilitate the international sports,the host nation as the society perceive it whereas,others anticipate it is an unpleasant idea.
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will discuss both
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that there is
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of investors and sport
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and
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are prone to taking drugs where
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will state my opinion.
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events attract investors
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jobs in the community,
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is because there is a huge number of visitors and sports
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, Olympic
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for the host nation since by that moment there is
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of followers
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they get to know major development that
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trending there.
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,2021 stars newspapers indicated that there is 60% growth in countries
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hold Olympic
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every season.
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,games are fundamental for the development of the city managing
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activities
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,the Players are prone to taking drugs so that they can have maximum energy to sustain them ,
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when it is discovered it does not only deteriorate their name but
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the name of their country.
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, in 2000 half of the players in Europe had 30% content of drug from lab results done in
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a bad picture of the wonderful
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football. To sum up,having the responsibility to manage international game
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is an excellent phenomenon for that country.My opinion is to have rules that govern
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so that they are not detrimental to the country
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it is done.
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