Many families move to different countries. Some people think children can benefit from this, while others consider it is hard for children if families move to a foreign country. Discuss both views and your opinion.

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Migration is

general

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tend

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trend

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over

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the world.

although

people are moving to different

countries

for various

purpose

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purposes

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,sometimes they move with family

member

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and intend to live there.

However

,few individuals believe the trend of relocation would be beneficiary

while

others think migrating to another country with family could be harmful for

children

thus

believe moving

children

to a different country with the family will be devisee.

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this

essay will discuss both opinions and illustrate my own opinion. To commence with,in many developing

countries

citizens have

common

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tendency to move to the rich state

for staying

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to stay

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there because

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developing

countries

provides

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huge facilities for

its

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own citizens.

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, if you move to

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the Uk

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with your family you will get many lucrative benefits which

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education and medical facilities free of cost which is not provided in third-world

countries

As a result

Children

can

grown-up

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in a

loudable

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loud

ambience and get a chance to apply their creativity and eventually, they become

a good human beings

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Therefore

, I would say migrating

children

with family

come

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up with great advantages.

On the other hand

,Other individuals

intend to

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believe if families make plans

for living

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to live

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abroad

then

kids could suffer more

to adjust

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in adjusting

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to an unknown environment.

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, it is obvious that in the migration process most of the time kids have to face forceful circumstances during moving abroad

this

is why departure process reasonably difficult for infants.

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moving

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when moving

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from Asin to Europ

countries

children

will suffer from cold issues because they are not used to surviving

with

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such

cold weather.so sometimes migration could be damaging for the

children

To conclude

,in my

opinion

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moving to foreign states

beneficial

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benefits

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outweigh to drawbacks because if

children

stay in wealthy

countries

it leads to

build

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a better life and

enhance

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their quality of education. they can expose themself to the competitive world.

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