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Band 3.5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make some comparisons where relevant

The bar chart offers data about the percentage of the general
population
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 and how
wealth
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 is distributed in eight different regions,
such
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 as North
America
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, China, Other
Asia
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 Pacific, India,
Europe
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, Africa, Latin
America
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 and Caribean, and Rich
Asia
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 Pacific. It can be clearly seen, that the percentage of the
population
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 and global
wealth
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 are not directly proportional. With regard to
population
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, The chart shows how China, Other
Asia
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 Pacific, India, even
Europe
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, have the highest per cent, with 25% for China, 16% for Other
Asia
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 Pacific and India, followed by 15 % for
Europe
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, while Africa, Latin
America
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 and Caribean, North
America
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 and Rich
Asia
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 Pacific record just under 10 %.
On the other hand
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, North
America
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, Europa, and Rich
Asia
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 Pacific are the more rich regions with 34 %, 30% and 24 % respectively. Regarding
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the rest of them, they do not even reach 5% of global
wealth
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. To sum up, despite
of
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North
America
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 and Rich
Asia
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 Pacific
have
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 less than 6% of the global
population
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, they remark over 24% of the general
wealth
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 distribution, while regions with more inhabitants are less rich.
Europe
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 seems to be more balanced, it has 15% of the
population
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 with 30 % of global
wealth
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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