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Last month you had an overseas holiday with some friends where you stayed at their house. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: Thank them for the holiday and the photos explain why you didn’t write earlier and invite them to come and stay with you. .

#month #holiday #friends #house #photos #didn’t
Dear Robert I received the photographs of our
last
 vacation which I had spent with you in your home country
Maldives
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the Maldives
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. It is one of my favourite
destination
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and I always wished to visit
this
 beautiful place. Let me
first
 apologise that I could not write to you earlier and it has a reason. As soon as I landed in India, I received
job
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a job
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 offer from another city. I
then
 had to move to
this
 new place and settling there took some time. I am extremely thankful for organising
this
 trip as well as providing accommodation at your living place which I never expected in a foreign nation. What should I say
the
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about the
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 photographs of
Maldives
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the Maldives
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 vacation. The pictures have come up very well especially the ones on the beach and the candid ones. Some of them are already on their way
for
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to
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 making the portraits to be a part of my living room walls
. .
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 Now, it’s my turn to invite you to
the
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India. As you told me that in
next
 month there are some public holidays in
Maldives
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the Maldives
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. I think it will be a good time to plan your vacation here
then
..
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.
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 It would be
a
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great as you reach and am sure we will have a great time together. Take care, see you soon. Warm wishes Akshay
Submitted by akshay.thakare2804 on

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