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There is too much noise in public places in cities.What are the causes of this problems? What can be done to solve the problems?

#noise #places #cities
Nowadays,
noise
 is one of the biggest problems in the city. It not only makes
people
 feel uncomfortable but
also
 makes
people
 have health problems. There are many causes to explain why there is too much
noise
.
Firstly
, today, the citizens are more and more crowded. Because of the poor,
people
 in the countryside go to the
citys
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city's
city
, find a job to make money.
That is
 why public areas, workplaces, and roads are always in a state of continuous work.
This
 causes a
lot
 of
noise
 to be generated.
Second
, human needs are increasing day by day.
This
 inevitably creates a
lot
 of
noise
.
For example
, after a very tiring day at work, some hobbyists go to bars for entertainment or some
people
 often turn on very loud music at their house just to satisfy their hobby.
This
 is
also
 a reason why there is a
lot
 of
noise
. In my opinion,
to
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completely
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noise
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 is impossible because it is an inevitable thing that we have to adapt to in life.
However
, we can minimize
noise
 with many different solutions. The government needs to set a curfew to limit
noise
 in the city. Not only that
,
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they
also
 need to create more jobs in the countryside to avoid migration. For each individual, it takes common sense to minimize
noise
. We need to change our lifestyle, change our preferences to avoid making a
lot
 of
noise
. In short,
noise
 is a very annoying thing and there are many causes for it, so governments and individuals need to come up with reasonable solutions to reduce it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • traffic congestion
  • infrastructure development
  • public announcement systems
  • street performances
  • noise regulations
  • soundproof materials
  • public transportation
  • designated quiet zones
  • green spaces
  • buffer zones
  • public awareness
  • community efforts
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