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Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trenda and fashions than what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nothing is stable in the world,
people
's hobbies and interesting things to do are keep changing over time and current
trend
 plays a vital role behind these changes.
People
 are fond of copying market trends and making them an important part of their free time rather than thinking about what they really wish to do. I do concur with the said statement mainly because of two reasons, individuals like to show others as they are cool and addicted to social media platforms. I have explained my points of view in the
further
 paragraphs. To commence with, many individuals believe that it is cool to stay with the
trend
 more than what they really like to do.
For example
, nowadays video roasting is the
trend
, there are many YouTubers and Tiktokers doing these whole days and they are very popular among the youngsters.
This
trend
also
 influences adults to make roasting videos at any cost because they
also
 want to become popular and cool on social media among their friends and followers. Children are leaving their hobbies for
this
. In
this
 era of technology, social media platforms becoming more addictive than drugs. Humans blindly spend their time behind it where they educate themselves with the ongoing fashion and trends.
For instance
, they are the group of
people
 who leave their corporate jobs, started making travelling blogs and became well-known widely and rich,
this
 is eye-catching for many young birds where they are forgetting their most likely past-time activities and encourage to visit new destinations to create video blogs only. To conclude, these days
people
 get attracted more towards trends and fashion, they do not think and care about their likings, parents should educate them, that who follows his interest he is the only one who can become a success in that work. So to acquire knowledge about the ongoing craze is really nice but it should not replace
people
's own hobbies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reflection of trends
  • Personal preferences
  • Social media influencers
  • Technological advancements
  • Generational shifts
  • Marketing and advertising
  • Traditional vs. modern hobbies
  • Societal expectations
  • Economic factors
  • Psychological need
  • Belonging and acceptance
  • Accessible
  • Affordable
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