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five various product category in term of the number of export earnings and the change of values proportion from 2015 to 2016.

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Some of the export
earnings
 from 2015 – 2016 have increased and some have decreased. The export
earnings
 cause a huge impact
to
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 the economy which leads to impact on our society as well.
This
 is why it is so important to know accurately the rise and fall of
earnings
.
This
 text will be focused on
earnings
 from 5 different
products
. The 5
products
 are petroleum
products
, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
 and textiles.
Firstly
,
the
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petroleum
products
 increased by 3%. In 2015, it earned around 61
billion
 dollars while in 2016, it earned around 62 – 63
billion
 dollars. The engineered goods increased more than the previous one have, it increased in 8.5% which shows that demands for engineered goods
such
 as transportation have increased rapidly in the year. Meanwhile, the gems and jewellery’s income decreased by 5.18% which made 43
billion
 dollars decline to 40 – 41
billion
. The agricultural
products
 didn’t have a big change. Increasing by 0.81%, we can tell that the demand for them
are
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 steady. The textiles had the biggest change of all, increasing by an astonishing amount of 15.24%. these export
earning
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 have benefited and harmed us in many ways, but
the
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 need to know them is the same.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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