More and more students at university today are not choosing to study science. Why is this happening? What are the effects of this?

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In the past, the majority of parents always encouraged their children to study in
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the number of students in higher education
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for
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continues to reduce.
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look at the reasons why
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explore the potential effects of
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phenomenon. The primary reason that studying in branches of
science
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becomes less and less common is changing attitude towards education. In the twentieth century, those who studied in related
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faculties
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medicine,
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and engineering were considered to be
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and usually offered high salaries and high job securities, while those who graduated from other fields were left behind. Fortunately, children in
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generation see things differently. They give more valves to other majors and opt
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for their choices. They learn that studying other courses , apart from
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provide them with high income and respect too.
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a great shift in job industries. The researcher, scientist and other relevant careers in
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science
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field
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will be in high demand and eventually shortage.
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would lead to fewer technological developments.
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, the number of those who graduated from
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faculty,
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as Arts , Business Administration ,and law, rises and contribute to several
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in their countries. To sum up, educational perspective
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play an important role
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shift causing lowering numbers in
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learners and employees shortage in
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, it is a blessing in disguise because
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development in
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will come up and
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will lead to sustainable development.
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