More and more students at university today are not choosing to study science. Why is this happening? What are the effects of this?

In the past, the majority of parents always encouraged their children to study in
science
field
.
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the number of students in higher education
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for
science
program
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these
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continues to reduce.
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essay will
first
look at the reasons why
this
happens, and
then
explore the potential effects of
this
phenomenon. The primary reason that studying in branches of
science
becomes less and less common is changing attitude towards education. In the twentieth century, those who studied in related
science
faculties
in particular
medicine,
science
and engineering were considered to be
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and usually offered high salaries and high job securities, while those who graduated from other fields were left behind. Fortunately, children in
this
generation see things differently. They give more valves to other majors and opt
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for their choices. They learn that studying other courses , apart from
science
, can
also
provide them with high income and respect too.
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phenomenon
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a great shift in job industries. The researcher, scientist and other relevant careers in
science
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field
will be in high demand and eventually shortage.
This
would lead to fewer technological developments.
On the other hand
, the number of those who graduated from
further
faculty,
such
as Arts , Business Administration ,and law, rises and contribute to several
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in their countries. To sum up, educational perspective
developing
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play an important role
to
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this
shift causing lowering numbers in
science
learners and employees shortage in
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a specific
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field
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.
However
, it is a blessing in disguise because
further
development in
different
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field
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will come up and
this
will lead to sustainable development.
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