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Some people think it is the responsibility for government to ensure the people have healthy lifestyle. Other think people should have a free for their own lifestyle decision. Discusse both view and give your opinion.

#people #responsibility #government #lifestyle #decision #discusse
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people
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the people
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 think the
government
 must help them in reducing the
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affects
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effects
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 of disease on
thier
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their
 lives by providing tools or
equibments
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equipment
. the
second
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view
seem
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thier
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their
 have
own
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their own
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desicion
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decision
 of how they live and how they act. In
this
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discuss
discussed
 the two
pointsa
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points
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fisrt
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first
 of all, the
health
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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need
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 more
efforts
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 from both
people
 and the
government
. Many
people
they
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loves
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 to keep fit and they eats
health
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healthy
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 food and
mange
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manage
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thier
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their
 calories intake but due to low
income
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,income
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 they couldn't register in any Gym or fitness
center
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. In
this
 case, the
availbility
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availability
 of parks or
social
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traning
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training
trading
center
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 for
puplic
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public
 can reduce the stress on these
people
.
For example
, some studies in Japan
,
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 found the
diabietc
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diabetic
diabetes
 disease was reduced around 60%
afte
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of
 the
government
 opened new facilities of
traning
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training
 and
health
center
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centre
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 for free for her
people
.
on the contrary
, few of
people
 found
this
 is private issues and can't anyone
interfer
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interfere
 with it, they
has
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 the right to live the life as he
want
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. for
instant
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, in
Sweden
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,Sweden
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 the depression rate between
people
 was increased in the past 5 years after the
government
 made laws
force
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 the
resturants
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restaurants
 do not
serve
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to serve
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 fatty food for
people
 under 18. I
stongly
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strongly
 agree with the fact the
government
 is responsible to help her
people
 to live
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a health
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health
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healthy
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 lifestyle and
provide
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providing
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 them with
good
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a good
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 environment
taht
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that
 enable them to live as they wish. By building
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a park
the park
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park
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parks
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 and
decrease
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decreasing
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 the gym fees these small steps maker
enroumous
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enormous
 changes in lifestyle. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, the efforts must
evenly
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 distributed between
people
 and
government
 rules to
every one
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everyone
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 become satisfied in
thier
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their
 life.
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